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Writing TipsWRITING TIPS
Sufficient Support and Detail

 
 

You should reread your draft and imagine yourself as the audience. Pretend you don’t know anything about the topic. Ask yourself the following questions:

  1. Are there any gaps in information or detail that would help explain a supporting point?
  2. If you are using chronological order, are there any gaps in the sequence that need an additional sentence to complete the time order?
  3. If you are using space order, have you mentioned all the things that can create a complete picture of the space?
  4. If you are using climactic order, have you included all the really important details?
  5. Are there any details that may distract the audience from the subject?
  6. Are all of the details relevant?

Example

First Draft

This paragraph does not include enough details to support the idea of finding a good place to study.

Building blocks without sufficient supportTo be a more successful student, you should find one place that you can always use for studying. Ideally, this study place should be yours. It could be a corner of your living room. It should have everything you need. People should not distract you. If you perform a variety of activities in the same place, they will tend to compete with one another and make concentration difficult. You want a place that encourages studying.

 

Revised Draft

This paragraph includes all the details to support the idea of finding a good place to study. It is in the order of importance.

Building blocks with sufficent supportA Place to Study

To be a more successful student, you should find one place that you can always use for studying. Ideally, this study place should be yours, where you can leave your books and materials even when you are not there. It should be a place where you will be as free as possible from distractions and where you will feel comfortable studying. It could be a large walk-in closet, a desk in your bedroom, or a corner of your living room. You will need good lighting, your books and papers nearby, and everything that might take your mind off your work put away. Also, if you have a family or other people living with you, you will want to ask them not to disturb you when you are in your study place. One proven way to increase concentration and to make study time more effective is to teach yourself to only study in your study spot. If you perform a variety of activities in the same place, they will tend to compete with one another and make concentration difficult. What you want is a place that encourages studying and learning and nothing else.